Wild At Heart (Zuko)
Title: Wild At Heart (Zuko)
Author: Lone-wolf-fanfics
Topic: Avatar: The Last Airbender
Genre: Hurt/Comfort
Critiqued by: Linstar
He-llo, I’m Linstar and this is the last part of Wild At Heart. I finally have realized that the fic capitalizes the “At”, which would make my WaH initialization wrong. However, that’s grammatically incorrect, so I’m keeping my initialization. Sue me.
Last time, the Sue continued her regurgitation of The Puppeteer, and it was bland and boring.
Our counters:
Sunny Scene Change: 6
Be Original!: 58
Get… to… the… point!: 252
Sentenced. To. Death: 409
On to the fic!
Chapter Seventy-Two
Hama was apprehended by the same prisoners that she kept in chains but to get there, Katara was forced to do things she didn’t want to.
Oh, so we’re just telling the plot regurgitation instead of showing it now. Blegh.
Forced to use a bending technique that she had never considered before.
That doesn’t sound so bad without context.
Sentenced. To. Death: 410
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