Title: Mass Effect Betrayal
Author: JacenAntilles
Topic: Mass Effect
Media: Video game
Genre: Sci-fi (why did you even bother giving it a genre if you’re going to state the obvious?)
URL: https://www.fanfictiony.net/s/14188265/1/
Critiqued by Crazy Minh
Hello, wonderful lunatics, and welcome back to The Asylum! I’m your riffer of the day, Crazy Minh, and today’s fic is ahead of schedule, but for good reasons. Let me explain.
Now, some of the more astute readers may have noticed that I tend to put a YouTube video at the end of my riffs that somewhat link into the topic of next week’s riff. My last riff was the final installment of The Gaming Brother, where I used said video to hint that I’d be going back to Fly Me To The Moon, the Bayonetta/Evangelion badfic that I was covering before Spooktober.
That…isn’t happening now.
Fly Me To The Moon was shit, but it was boring shit. I don’t just mean that literally, I mean that I was struggling to find witty remarks for a riff of a fic that nobody on this site was really reading. And I was really finding it hard to make witty commentary about that story. It was awful, sure, but there was almost nothing there to play off of. It was also fucking long. I went into it thinking I could blitz through it in less than three weeks, but I had to split the first chapter alone into multiple installments due to how wordy it was. I was bored, (presumably) you, the reader, were bored, and it was just not fun to riff.
So, lesson learned: find better material, and don’t just assume that because something is bad that it is easy to critique. Therefore, while this fic was the one I’d planned to cover after finishing Fly Me To The Moon, the timetable for it has been moved up.
And, ooh boy, this is a goldmine of awful. We’ve gotten a infodump for Mass Effect already, so let’s jump in with the description:
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